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#1Miyu Kento Empty Miyu Kento Fri Sep 14, 2012 1:40 am

Miyu Kento

Miyu Kento
Identity of a Soul
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Name: Miyu Kento
Alias: Weeping Nightengale
Age: 18
Age of Appearance: 17

Gender: Female
Race/Species: Human



What Makes a 'Person'

Appearance: For her age Miyu is a real eye catcher, her soothing bambibrown eyes and long redbrown hair. Her haircut goes well with her facial structure, a side bang with slightly doll like curly hair- Wearing little to no make up most of the time her lips are a natural, nudy peach colour, a complimenting colour to the cute white smile usually seen, giving her feminine features an innocent twist.
Her pale toned skin reminds people of a porcelian doll a lot of the time, linking well with her petite body which can look delicate and easy to break. Even with her slender appearance for a person who is 1.70m tall, she has the perfect curves of a woman catching the eye and breath of many men. Miyu's skin has always been well cared for making it as soft as an infants skin, every patch of skin silky and soft. Small feet and hands come with her natural frame, her fingers a perfect proportion for the size of her. The doll like complexion is completed by a well trimmed and groomed look, even manicuring her nails.

Style/Clothing:
It is quite hard to describe what Miyu would wear. As any other teenage you young adult human girl she tends to wear nummorous outfits to certain occasions or mood she is in. Though to the certain style she attends is the more femine or slightly cute style. Wearing loose tshirts or pullovers as like it is a dress with suiting leggings and sneakers or boots. Though she loves dresses and skirts. Miyu never likes to wear the same dress twice in a row. So she always mix and match outfits turning it into something new but doesn't go over the top crazy. But bye living with her grandmother in a Dojo she also has do to her grandmothers wish , kimonos and yukatas. By her training she also wears tradition japanese clothing.

Tattoo's/Scars/Etc: When she was a child she has a scar on her stomach where she got attacked from a hollow. It was the first face to face action with the "supernatural" since that day the scar reminds her of her fear.

Personality:
Miyu is more of the gentle hearted though insecure person. Her self isolation brings her and drags her down into lonelyness. She mostly dislikes herways then she knows herself she is no normal human and feels more like a freak. Though is someone is willing to say hi she would not dare to give anyone the cold shoulder. On the otherhand she would give them a soft smile and a nervous though heart warming greeting. Miyu herself is quite helpful doesn't matter if enemy or friend everybody deserves some help from time to time.
Miyu is a young lady of tradition and takes her responsobilities serious. IT is something to keep her dead parents prooud of her and also her grandmother. She tends to many festivals and carnivals while keeping up with dance clases. She also plays a Koto a 17 sither string intrumant. She isn't though all into tradition. She loves to talk with her friends or text on her cellphone or go into the city shopping. The grandmother gives her though these privalleges to her hard work with her responsobilites.
When though through the accuatince from another side she is rather slightly nervous and afraid. Through unrational thinking she would do anything to bring that person away though not here what they have to say until someone litterly knocks her into commonsense. While learning more of them that they would help her she would apologize and feel guilty for her childish behaviour.
Other parts of Miyu that are though not that helpful to her in live is her naive characteristics. She slightly can believe the words from others that would bring her doing ungood deeds and not even knowing. Though this has never came into that then her grandmother is there.She can be very sensitive. She tends to cry often or fall into sadness. To keep this from coming she falls into her world of dreams or treasure memories she had not forgotten from the past the memories before the insident from the hollow that attacked her but it has not happened since because she isn't alone. Though if her grandmother would die she would fall into deep confusion of what lies in this world The feelings conflict with her pwoers which could be very dangoures. When she is angry scared or sad her powers are slightly more powerful then before. If someone could calm her down then that person would works wonders because of the fast trust she gave into that stranger.


Fighting Style:She isn't really a fighter though when there is no other option she will mostly fight. Her fighting style is though far range and defense attacks. She is rather weak herself. The only strength she has are her abilities.
Likes:

  • Stuffed animals
  • Sunny days
  • Her Family and friends
  • Sweets
  • Puppies and kittens
  • Singning

Dislikes:

  • the dark
  • scary whispering
  • haunted places
  • her abilities
  • mean people (guys who are abusive or see women as an object or just better said downright evil and cold-hearted women)
  • perverts

Ambitions/Dreams/Goals:

  • to find out who saved her back in the past.
  • to understand her abilities and find other who are quite similar to her
  • to find love

Strengths:

  • Traditional Japanese dances
  • Cooking and baking
  • To interact with nature
  • stratigistic and intelligent
  • keeping her calm
  • good aim

Fears & Weaknesses:

  • Esparda
  • hollows
  • she has a fear of the supernatural from her pst
  • spiders and snakes
  • weak
  • not the best runner


Gene's of a Race


FUllbringer Specifics

List of 'Auto-Known' Skills:

Object of Affinity:
Traditional japanese hair ordiment: comb

Affiliation:
She does not belog in any then she is still uncertain and rather most confused of what lies from the world of the living.

Fullbring Type: Object

Battle Information

Elemental Affinity: she is able to manipulate both wind and water

Ability/Abilities:
-Reiyoku manfestation


    Ability Name:Sasayaku yōna kaze
    Ability Description: Miyu would sing destinctive tunes or melodies as if it was a calling. Spiritual power will be sent of to different dimensions. Those willing to listen or that are chosen here this voice in there ear. When nearing her the voice will get louder until there are close and hear her singing with thier naked ear and not there mind.This could last up to 3 post but has a cooldown to 1-2 posts. This is as it is explained no attack only a way of calling others to her or lure them to her. like a path.
    Ability Name:Seishin henka kenshutsu
    Ability Description: Miyu has a distinctive reiatsu and reiyoku sencing through the ability to manipulate wind and water. When there is a cause of the wind or water balance to change which is made from different reiyoku shifting or reiatsu tention she can tell from a 25 mile radius. She perks up and listens closly to the winds or the dripping water to tell the exact location of the stranger.


General Techniques: (These are moves your character was taught or trained and developed on their own. They are things anyone would be able to learn and perform unless they are dependent on your unique race or abilities. Examples are custom shunpo variations, hakuda/zanjutsu techniques, and using your reiatsu on an object to simulate telekinesis.) Limit 5

    Technique Name:Tsumujikaze
    Technique Description: She lets her comb transform into a fan like weapon with this she can through a whind slash resembling like a whirlwind to the opponent. This is a far rage attack and the attack is a fast attack just like wind itselfs. This gust of wind slightly cuts but most overly thorws the opponent in a further distance making him collide into other objects. It has not charge though it has a cooldown from 1 post. This attack can also be used as a defense attack while letting her enemies slide farther away for her so she can flee.

    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: By the attack whil they fly a really far distance and the attack will leave seviere damage. Depending on the collisiouns can they live with serval body fractures and deep cuts and even loose concious
    Opponent is One Tier Lower: It is almost the same as for before. Though it would only cause a few bone fractures middle deep slash wounds and bruises. To mutiple use of this attack they can also loose concious.
    Opponent is Equal Tier: This will sure hurt them but not as bad ass the weaker oponents. They will still get caught up flying away colliding into a nearby building or tree but have 1 or 2 fractures couple small cuts and slash wounds but more they can easily stand up just feeling alot of pain
    Opponent is One Tier Higher: For people stronger then Miyu this attact has little affect to them. They will glide off a couple feet but be able to land back on to there feet like it is nothing. The arms and face would have slash wounds similar to papers cuts or slightly shallow cut wounds on the body not making it big of a deal.
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher: this has hardly effect on the oppontent they would probably have small paper cuts and move probably a couple inches away. It would be for them more of a nuise then a reall attack.



    Technique Name: Junsai
    Technique Description: Water Arises quickly infront of her. The water turns and combusts itsself into a firm wall of water proctecting her from long range and also close range attacks. This can be used often and the water can form and move around easily to attacks. The defense attack can last as long as wanted but needs a break from 1-2 posts

    Technique Effect Chart:
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: This blocks all the attacks of the oponnent and is not beakable. This can also break or damage their own weapon if used
    Opponent is One Tier Lower: This shows no effect either of ripping through the shield it will bring them to exhaustion.
    Opponent is Equal Tier: Depending on the attack and the mutple use it could be cut through but not all the time. The weakness is dirt or even ice. Also wind attacks then is is hard to bend around.
    Opponent is One Tier Higher: Can slightly slice through it like it was a normal water fountain or water fall.
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:This can slice comepletely through the shield and even impflict damage upon miyu.


    Technique Name:Aisuchēn
    Technique Description: This is an ability where both of her elements are used. It is more of a trap technique then an attack. This is easy in team work situations or trying to flee. Water comes and wraps around the wrists and ankles of the opponent. With another movement of her other fan she sieze wind of the water making it freeze. it could though slightly harm the wrists and ankle because of the cold tempature. the cooldown is to 1 post while the durability of the technique is to 1-2 posts
    Technique Effect Chart:

    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: It is for them unable to get themselfs free. Also through the cold tempature can strongly weak them an also injure them though no serious damage
    Opponent is One Tier Lower: It is the same as before but only the oponennt while get minor injuries by the attack though it is hard to get out of this attack
    Opponent is Equal Tier: This has no injury but they can not come out of this attack unless they equipt an element which can break the trap or melt it away
    Opponent is One Tier Higher: They can break the attack by breaking of the chains withtheir reiatsu. an have no injuries. They would think of this attack more of a nuise
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher: This shows no affect. They can simply break of the attack by seconds. So it would be as if breaking a twig.




Pre-Evolved Fullbring

Pre-Evolved Fullbring Name: Aishun
Pre-Evolved Fullbring Appearance: While in the pre-evolved state you see the slightly different glowing eyes colour. Slightly arm is covered by 2 differnt personas. Though together they cll them selfes Aishun. Ai shun is known as the twin spirit giving harmony in small villages. which is a folklore in her town.
The fans now summoned from her comb. These are not a durable though light metal that is fast and easy to move. While then her clothes change into a yukata. This exsposes her legs though gradualy goes over her theys though the bow in the back looks and resembles butterfly wings. The material of the clothing has a vast beautiful cherry blossom pattern.
Pre-Evolved Fullbring Ability:
Ability Types, Choose One to Base Yours Around:
Pre-Evolved Fullbring Techniques: (These are techniques available only in True/Togabito Form. Limit 6)

    Technique Name: Ikari no kaze dansu
    Technique Description: This is while using her wind element. The fans would be swung in a powerful motion depending in how much impact the attacvk would leave on the oponent. The winds are fast up to 10 mpm. the charge is zero because of the fast movement the duration goes up to 1 post and the cool down 2.

    Technique Effect Chart:
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: He will be thrown left to right not knowing when the madness will end as mostly to all of her wind attack come to servere til fatal injuries including bone fractures exhaustion bleeding ect.
    Opponent is One Tier Lower:A couple of servere bones fractures pure exhaustion and also the body will be covered with bruises.
    Opponent is Equal Tier: Only a pair of bone fractures bruises and slightly exhaustion
    Opponent is One Tier Higher: They only survies probably by 1 or 2 bone fracutre and a couple of bruises can be destroyed by a good and stong counter attack.
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher: The stronger oponents will sadly suffer by the ulgy bruises left back on their own body though this attack can be destroyed by a counter attack



Technique Name: U~ōtāshotto
Technique Description: The Serphants mouth opens while she streches out her hand. She creates out of the water humidity water drops. Though the water drops for into deadly needles flying out of all directions to the opponent. The charge is quick like the duration it can go to a half to 1 post while the cool down is 2 posts

Technique Effect Chart:
Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: It is like getting shot by daggers. The body will be surrounded by deep cuts around the body and also weaken the opponent by touching and stabingcertain nerve points of the body.
Opponent is One Tier Lower: The cuts are deep though not as deep to weaker tiers though it can be very dangerous getting caught up in this kind of attack.
Opponent is Equal Tier: No fatal to almost severe injures unless by mutlple use though weakens the opponent weakly
Opponent is One Tier Higher: Slight to normal pain in the body and the unability to move a certain body part though they can counterattack this attack.
Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:Only a slight pinched to minor injures. Probably a bruise and a bad attitude.
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Evolved Fullbring

Evolved Fullbring Name: Sinaishun
Evolved Fullbring Appearance: While her Fans slowly change in to a metal like substand making it also more durable for close range fighting a Serphant rotates and slightly floats about the service around her. A dragon is intwined with the serphant for it resembling both of her objects.
The Wind looks majestic with his goldolive colored skill and white shimmering mane. Also the gold eyes pierce into the soul of the ipononent. On the other hand to the serphant is a white silver silky fur caot though looking quite shiny as if it just been in the water blue soothing eyes and loong whiskers. It is as Ying yang was her soul.
Evolved Fullbring Ability: same as pre evolved state.
Evolved Fullbring Techniques:




    Technique Name: Fū ryū no kegawa de ōwa reta
    Technique Description: Manipulating the wind it takes over the persona of her fullbringer dragon. This wind attack movies like a flying dragon around the target and confusing it. This hits and slashes from any loved side. The dragon can rap around like the serphant take the opponent ans slam hi to the floor or squeezes them. The attacks are really fast and are unpredictable. The charge goes to one post. While the duration of the attack can go up to 2 post. Though the cool down is 3 posts.

    Technique Effect Chart:
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: While they have no way to break this attack. Like the attack before they could lose concesness and have bone fractures through out the body. for these Oponents I would suggest to dodge the attack which itsself is quite difficult.
    Opponent is One Tier Lower: Also here it will leave some serious damage to the opontent. From the heith of falling down they will lose there conciousness. They will still be alive but most likely have serious head damge or brain damage they could be lucky only having some bad arm and leg fractures.
    Opponent is Equal Tier: This cause damage but not as serious. They would just come out of the attack with serious back pains. By a mutple use of this attack they can also have the equivilant damage of opponents of weaker tiers though it give a change for them to dodge.
    Opponent is One Tier Higher: Also here this could cause damage but most like a small back pain or just a couple of bruises to the body. No serious damages it attended to this oponent though the attack is still strong to hurt them though only a little
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:The worst thing this oponennt has to suffer by this attack is getting his hair messed up.




    Technique Name: Suirō no ikari
    Technique Description: She is surrounded first by thousands of waterdrops floating in the sky. These water drops then move creating a water like persona resembeling a Serphant. Her eyes suddenly glow a blue to ice blue color. With a hand movement she can manipulate this water like serphant towards to her opponent. They would get caugh up in the water body then geting thrown up to the sky but then dragged to hit then the ground. The charge lasts about 2 posts. The attack one and the cooldown up to 3 posts. one thing this attack can only move in one direction so is slightly a chance of dodging out of the attack. The offense attack is also good as a defense attack

    Technique Effect Chart:
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: This gives severe damage it is hard and easly goes through thier counter attacks and defense attacks. This is difficult to dodge.
    Opponent is One Tier Lower: Also here it will leave some serious damage to the opontent. From the heith of falling down they will lose there conciousness. They will still be alive but most likely have serious head damge or brain damage they could be lucky only having some bad arm and leg fractures.
    Opponent is Equal Tier: This cause damage but not as serious. They would just come out of the attack with serious back pains. By a mutple use of this attack they can also have the equivilant damage of opponents of weaker tiers though it give a change for them to dodge.
    Opponent is One Tier Higher: Also here this could cause damage but most like a small back pain or just a couple of bruises to the body. No serious damages it attended to this oponent though the attack is still strong to hurt them though only a little
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:The worst thing this oponennt has to suffer by this attack is getting his close wet. By a use of their attack the serphant will dissapear and it will be as if it was only a rainy day.




The Past, The Present, The Future.. What is Your History?

History:
Miyu was born into a small though rich family in a dojo. The Father disapeared before her death. Though not purposly. As said due to a tragical accident he lost his life. It was hard for her mother to raise her Child but her grandfather and grandmother helped them. Though Miyus mother herself couldn#t handle the fact being alone. While Miyu turned three her mother attemped suicide. She hung herself in the nearby forrest where her father supposivly died. It was told her mother and father left on a journey though will come back. Only knowing in the future to be a lie to give the young child happiness.
Though since tragic moments in her life she still had a wonderful childhood with her grandmother. Playing in the springtime while playing on the playground or in the park when the sakura trees blossom. Though while playing she has found out a spectacular ability. She has first used her power as a fullbringer to such a young age calling upon the spirits with her voice though it wasn't any normal spirits. At the age of 6 she had seen a Man dressed in a black kimono looking upon her with a cold though father like look. It was like seeing herself in him. Slightly she followed him as he wanted. Her grandmother and grandfather sensed the danger. The engery changed as the man who called himself a shinigami took her into safety " I will protect you and so will my companions...my young beautiful daughter Miyu." She smiled. "Papa you came.." it was then the first time seeing though the monster behind him of which they called a hallow. There appearance pierced fear through her eyes which only my the wind and water circulate around her. The powers she had went bezirk while breaking the small placing and luring the creature to her. Her Father was a beginner shinigami. It was hard to attack all at once and fell back injured. A Young women very powerful appeared. Miyu felt the reiatsu flowing through her. it was enough to take away Miyus powers. Miyu was defensless. though she seen as one of the hallows wanting to attack her father. "papa!" she ran towards him and holding him tightly around her arms. The hallow attacked her and slashed her stomach giving her a cut wound.
This has made the young white haired stranger furious. With her attacks she killed them off one by one then going to the small little girl stroking through her hair. "don't worry young one your father will come back when he is better and you will be better too.." she said slightly then dissapearing. Her Grandparents came as in with other people in the town. A ambulance was called and miyu was brought to safety. Though through the happening she has forget everything thinking it was only a dream or nightmare though parts flash back like a movie of a certain type. Though this went while she got older.
Since what happened her grandparents taught her many ways traditional dances and a fan fighting techniques. This is to mantain her self dicsipline and concetration of her powers. IT helped along the way and Miyu found alot of joy doing this. She took part in many different ceramonies or big festivals giving in good luck and as worshiping nature and the spirit world. Though she diesliked the point of it. She has grown a feasr then her ability was coming back to her. She was hearing voices when no one was there and seeing faces or spirits going around even the reappearance of a hollow. IT brought her in strong fear that she has also lost happines unless she is at home though at school she is more kept to herself mostly since her grandfather passed away on old age.
All she has now is her grandmother. Miyu has tooken care of her since the death of her grandfather proving her strength of moving forward. She studied harder getting excelent grades in school and as before the ability stopped until hitting again age 17. Then she had to fight and protext her grandmother from a weak espada. Through the love and affection for her mother Miyu had the power to evolve quickle in her full evolved form before using her pre evilved form. She defeated the arcanner and he vanished away. looking over her shoulder her grandmother was slightly injured. A doctor came to check on her though the news wasn't any good news. The grandmother lays now in a deep coma while she gets weaker and weaker every day. Miyu counts the days though for her state and age she can not live alone her life is in danger of which we speak then others would love to mis abuse her strength and unique power.



RP Sample:
Laila arrived from her long journey out of Clover town. Her heart set at ease in this town of which she heard of. A town which is known for its warm hot water springs, grand and relaxing hotels and the numerous places on the street to get something delicious and warm in their stomachs. A small yawn slipped out of her tender lips as she stretched her arms. A small break never sounded like a bad idea and her "Fiance" was long then gone from finding her since she had a good head start.

Walking through out the street turning around the each corner of the humble Hosenka. There she found a hot spring to her liking. It was known and restricted only for women. That brought the soothing thought have not seeing any peeping tom around while she baths. Before she went there to the hot spring she checked in a close by hotel. Bringing her stuff away and taking out a good amount of jewels out of her pocket. "This should be enough" she said softly to herself while then leaving her room. Returning to the spa she checked in and went first to the changing room taking off her clothes , then formally folding them in the small space to put in her clothes and shoes. Wrapping a white Towel around her naked body she went first to the showers. The cold water hitting her skin was a tingle sensation at first that brings goosebumps to her skin. The beautiful pale skin color faded into a slight redskin tone. She washed herself as then she stood up going to the springs.

Walking towards she took a glimpse of the springs. Seeing different sorts of women. Some were mages even those that belonging to a guild. Though she wanted some peace and quite. Slowly dipping her feet before entering she takes a look around before putting up her hair. She didn't really want her hair to get wet. Stepping into the one of the several springs she set out an relaxing sigh while then closing her eyes and drifting off into her own little world.

#2Miyu Kento Empty Re: Miyu Kento Sat Sep 15, 2012 4:18 pm

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Good luck. Tell us when your done. Smile

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#3Miyu Kento Empty Re: Miyu Kento Tue Sep 18, 2012 2:11 am

Miyu Kento

Miyu Kento
finished!!!

#4Miyu Kento Empty Re: Miyu Kento Tue Sep 18, 2012 5:49 am

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Anonymous
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ok i be the mod looking at your app.

Ability Name:Sasayaku yōna kaze
Ability Description: Miyu would sing destinctive tunes or melodies as if it was a calling. Spiritual power will be sent of to different dimensions. Those willing to listen or that are chosen here this voice in there ear. When nearing her the voice will get louder until there are close and hear her singing with thier naked ear and not there mind.This could last up to 3 post but has a cooldown to 1-2 posts
Ok can you explain this better is this a attacking ability or something else? not really clear to me.

Evolved Fullbring Ability: She was born with this ability though had awoken when she had turned about 17 with her first fight against a powerful hollow called Michugen
this is not a ability it a explanation for how she got her evolved fullbring so rework this please.

Technique Name: Fū ryū no kegawa de ōwa reta
Technique Description: Manipulating the wind it takes over the persona of her fullbringer dragon. This wind attack movies like a flying dragon around the target and confusing it. This hits and slashes from any loved side. The dragon can rap around like the serphant take the opponent ans slam hi to the floor or squeezes them. The attacks are really fast and are unpredictable. The charge goes to one post. While the duration of the attack can go up to 2 post. Though the cool down is 3 posts.

Technique Effect Chart:
Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: This attack or for these oponents fatal. While they have no way to break this attack. Like the attack before they would lose concesness and have fatal injuries and bone fractures through out the body. for these Oponents I would suggest to dodge the attack which itsself is quite difficult.
Opponent is One Tier Lower: Also here it will leave some serious damage to the opontent. From the heith of falling down they will lose there conciousness. They will still be alive but most likely have serious head damge or brain damage they could be lucky only having some bad arm and leg fractures.
Opponent is Equal Tier: This cause damage but not as serious. They would just come out of the attack with serious back pains. By a mutple use of this attack they can also have the equivilant damage of opponents of weaker tiers though it give a change for them to dodge.
Opponent is One Tier Higher: Also here this could cause damage but most like a small back pain or just a couple of bruises to the body. No serious damages it attended to this oponent though the attack is still strong to hurt them though only a little
Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:The worst thing this oponennt has to suffer by this attack is getting his hair messed up.
Ok for the lower tiers tone down the damage for this or reword it for we do not let any killing happen normally in rp unless it a death enabled thread.

Technique Name: Suirō no ikari
Technique Description: She is surrounded first by thousands of waterdrops floating in the sky. These water drops then move creating a water like persona resembeling a Serphant. Her eyes suddenly glow a blue to ice blue color. With a hand movement she can manipulate this water like serphant towards to her opponent. They would get caugh up in the water body then geting thrown up to the sky but then dragged to hit then the ground. The charge lasts about 2 posts. The attack one and the cooldown up to 3 posts. one thing this attack can only move in one direction so is slightly a chance of dodging out of the attack. The offense attack is also good as a defense attack

Technique Effect Chart:
Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: This attack or for these oponents fatal. While they have no way to break this attack. Like the attack before they would lose concesness and have fatal injuries and bone fractures through out the body. for these Oponents I would suggest to dodge the attack which itsself is quite difficult.
Opponent is One Tier Lower: Also here it will leave some serious damage to the opontent. From the heith of falling down they will lose there conciousness. They will still be alive but most likely have serious head damge or brain damage they could be lucky only having some bad arm and leg fractures.
Opponent is Equal Tier: This cause damage but not as serious. They would just come out of the attack with serious back pains. By a mutple use of this attack they can also have the equivilant damage of opponents of weaker tiers though it give a change for them to dodge.
Opponent is One Tier Higher: Also here this could cause damage but most like a small back pain or just a couple of bruises to the body. No serious damages it attended to this oponent though the attack is still strong to hurt them though only a little
Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:The worst thing this oponennt has to suffer by this attack is getting his close wet. By a use of their attack the serphant will dissapear and it will be as if it was only a rainy day.
Same as above tone it down or reword it.

History needs to be longer if you want a higher tier also more techs will hope as well.

At the moment if i was going to grade this i would say you would get only a tier of 2-2 at most.

#5Miyu Kento Empty Re: Miyu Kento Tue Sep 18, 2012 9:39 pm

Miyu Kento

Miyu Kento
edited

#6Miyu Kento Empty Re: Miyu Kento Fri Sep 21, 2012 8:09 am

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good history but could you explain how she loses her power twice and gains it back it just seems a bit iffy to me. Also you may want to flesh out the history more.

#7Miyu Kento Empty Re: Miyu Kento Fri Sep 21, 2012 9:14 pm

Miyu Kento

Miyu Kento
I explained it it is because of the inicident .... and I dont want to flesh out my history

#8Miyu Kento Empty Re: Miyu Kento Sun Sep 23, 2012 10:07 am

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Still would you please make the technique edits

#9Miyu Kento Empty Re: Miyu Kento Sun Sep 23, 2012 4:22 pm

Miyu Kento

Miyu Kento
i did do the technique edit

#10Miyu Kento Empty Re: Miyu Kento Mon Sep 24, 2012 1:18 am

Anna Nanashi

Anna Nanashi
seeing the techs revised then I accept this app at a 1-4 now you need one more mod or admin to accept this as well.

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