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#1Isshin Miamoto Empty Isshin Miamoto Thu Mar 28, 2019 2:48 am

Grym Balthorn

Grym Balthorn



THE SHINIGAMI APPLICATION
Name: Isshin Miamoto
Alias:
Real Age: 230 years old
Phys. Age: 23 years old
Gender: Male
Personality: Isshin is a man who is good natured, always willing to talk to someone and assist any way he can, due to his upbringing, he has a general behavior of the phrase "treat those the way you wish to be treated.", which for him is respect and honor and is not afraid to start a fight when it comes to anyone picking on a person who can't defend themselves even if the bully is a noble.



CHARACTER APPEARANCE
Height: 6 feet 5 inches tall
Weight: 210 pounds
Physical Traits:
Spoiler:


THE COMBAT INFORMATION
General Fighting Style: Isshin would be the kind of fighter that would hold back enough to give his opponent resistance so that when his opponent wears himself out, he would still have strength to continue fighting, he will use his Zanpakutou and Hakuda to fight, but he would use his Zanpakutou first and Hakuda if they get passed his Zanpakutou, when his Shikai is active, he will keep his opponent at a distance so that while he can cause his opponent to exhausted his opponent more by keeping at range.
Strengths: Hakuda, Zanjutsu, Strength, Reiatsu, Reireyoku Control And Agility.
Weaknesses: Kidou, sensing, reflexes, stamina, endurance, durability,
Ability Name: Kaze no Kabe
Ability Description: Kaze no kabe (Wind Wall)
Ability Description: this gale force wind can stop an ability up to a cero, 1 post cooldown

Ability Name:Sutōmuboruto (Storm Bolt)
Ability Description: and you can call down lightning from the clouds, this bolt of lightning has the strength of a Cero and has a one post cooldown.


ZANPAKUTO
Sealed Appearance: the Zanpakutou looks like a basic katana but the sheath is black with a lightning bolt going down the length of it, the weapons guard would be round with a depiction of a dragon weaving in and out of cloud around the radius of the guard.
Zanpakutou Name:  Arashi no zen'ei (Storm Vanguard)
Call Out Command: "Stir the turbulent heavens.


SHIKAI
Appearance: the Shikai of this weapon is that of a Jumonji Yari, a type of cross spear with two extra blades coming out of the sides of the spear head. The shaft of the spear would be oak with brass bands around the areas of the shaft that would be a foot and a half from the spearhead and butt of the spear, the area where the shaft and spearhead meet would have a jewel that would look like a yellow eye with a black, slitted pupil, possibly giving those who look at it the feeling of being watched by the weapon. (View picture here for example)
Spoiler:
Abilities: the Zanpakutou gains the ability to call down lightning from the sky and create powerful gales at Isshins command, for now Isshin doesn't have the ability to call lightning and wind at the same time, but with enough training he might, the following abilities are what the Zanpaktou gains in Shikai.

Ability Name: The Storm Stirs
Ability Description: As the Zanpaktou is released into Shikai, a storm begins to gather, roaring echos of thunder, blinding streaks of lightning and screaming gales of wind can be heard and seen overhead in the storm that's formed. This ability is purely cosmetic and only active in Shikai.

Ability Name: Raishin (Lightning Needle)
Ability Description: when the Zanpaktou is used for thrusting and slashing attacks, Isshin can choose to use the weapons power to launch a bolt of lightning. This bolt of Lightning deals Cero grade damage and has a one post cooldown.

Ability Name: Harikēn-ha (Hurricane Wave)
Ability Description: when the Zanpaktou is swung in a way to bludgeon a person with either the flat of the spearhead or any section of the Spears haft, the weapon can release a powerful burst of wind at an enemy. The wind has the damage grade of Cero and had a one post cooldown.



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TOUKAI
New Name: [What's your zanpakuto's new name?]
Appearance: [What does your bankai look like? Character appearance changes, weapon changes, etc.]
Abilities: [What abilities does your character gain]


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Side Notes: [Anything you didn't say up above that's relevant to your character goes here.]
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#2Isshin Miamoto Empty Re: Isshin Miamoto Sat Jun 22, 2019 4:05 pm

Ika Mazi

Ika Mazi
Pre-approving at 3-1 so you can start rpIng

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#3Isshin Miamoto Empty Re: Isshin Miamoto Sun Jun 23, 2019 2:49 am

Akira Bessho

Akira Bessho
Alright, let's start to work on your app. While you're pre-approved, there's still stuff that needs fixing:

- By my count you've got 9 strengths and 5 weaknesses, so:

- We've started treating Agility as a single strength of Speed and Shunpo rolled into one, since saying you have those as separate things and using slots makes no sense. That is to say, Agility and Speed are the same thing.
- Reflexes are still sort of the same thing as speed, and don't really count as a weakness.
- Your strength spread is just way too high. You've gotta trim those down quite a bit (Ideally something like 5/4, 2/1, or a similiar ratio of strengths to weaknesses). While I don't know how you want things to work out with your character I'd definitely say that you don't really need Zanjutsu and Hakuda as strengths. Plenty of characters have those as weaknesses and still engage in close combat. Those are for highly specialized characters that really augment those things into their abilities. Otherwise, you can just start sliding stuff like durability, endurance, and stamina into your weaknesses.

-Your abilities are all jumbled up, they need to be broken down into separate things to stay clear and concise. It looks like you have 2 offensive capabilities, and if you want to keep the thunderstorm forming overhead in there as a sort of flavor text/style points ability is fine too, so long as it's separate.
- Ability Name: Lightning
- Ability Description: Isshin fires a bolt of lightning from his Zanpakuto's spearhead which deals Cero level damage. One turn cooldown.

- Ability Name: Gale
- Ability Descritpion: Isshin swings his Zanpakuto, firing a burst of gale winds in front of him that deals Cero level damage. One turn cooldown.


Obviously, you don't need to use the names i used (they're kinda lame) but it's important that each capability be clearly marked as something separate.

#4Isshin Miamoto Empty Re: Isshin Miamoto Sun Jun 23, 2019 12:55 pm

Grym Balthorn

Grym Balthorn
I have made the changes and I forgot to change the names for the two abilities and I made the appropriate changes to my strengths and weaknesses, I hope they are more even then what I had it before.

#5Isshin Miamoto Empty Re: Isshin Miamoto Sun Jun 23, 2019 4:16 pm

Akira Bessho

Akira Bessho
Well, again: reflexes isn't a quantifiable weakness.

Also, your shikai abilities are all jumbled together. You'll definately need to break that down and list a few different individual abilities under your Shikai

#6Isshin Miamoto Empty Re: Isshin Miamoto Mon Jun 24, 2019 11:58 am

Ika Mazi

Ika Mazi
Approved 3-1. Congrats friendo!

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